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this is for the inter-twined souls
and all those unable to let go
its for the ones who are defined, and pigenholed
by the ones equally unkind, and forced to grow

its a requiem for lives that get mowed
hearts, feelings and emotions get controlled
and dominated by a world described
by the passage of time

its for all those moments equated,
to your unbalanced equation
the sum is a remainder, of your dreams desecrated
where hopes and high spirits are translated and compounded
to a life reformatted and founded
in a world no longer fruitful much less boundless

this is for the bastard children of god
unwanted and unfamiliar in a world long forgotten
uselessly try to slay our own spot, and pick our own cotton
so that our father might, more often than not
give a shit...
©2004-2010 ~-sr-mace
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the last of 3 im putting up. once again, im just practicing cause i want to start writing again., i dont rteally like them but whatever...im looking for feedback so any and all is welcome...

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:iconmatanza:
I am Jacks rising sense of agreement.

This sounds like a poem the narrarator from Fight club would writ..

and I love the way you expressed this. 'this is' 'its'... I guess it would be speaking of the poem in third pweson.. which is most excellent.. I love it.

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:icon-sr-mace:
thanks man :)....i put 2 others, hope u like ;)...

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Dark is the suede that mows like a harvest...
:icondoblica:
awesome
is the main point that God doesn't look after us? sorry, i jus t woke up.. im dazed =P

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I don't wish to be famous or a popular person. Only to be there in the background if you ever need me.

-Death to all who obstruct the path of Dobby. Woe unto their balls.-
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its a matter of nihlism i suppose. the main point is ironic in that the speaker is angry that people care lol. caring because he doesnt care so much...for the most part that is the main idea of the poem if it makes any sense...

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Dark is the suede that mows like a harvest...
:icongoodbye-kitty975:
this reads beautifully to Staind's Excess Baggage.

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proud owner of the Flying Goofball
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I haven't heard it, but I'll check it out. Thanks for the remarks and +fav :)

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Dark is the suede that mows like a harvest...
:icongoodbye-kitty975:
it's a lovely slow song that tugs at the heart strings... a bit on the heavier side of slow songs. hmmm... i'm terrible at describing it.

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proud owner of the Flying Goofball

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